Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create , while others struggle to survive . governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation . To what extent do you agree or disagree?

As we all know, famous celebrities

such

as musicians or actors can earn a lot of money

by

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their identity,

while

their nameless counterparts live in

embarassed

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embarrassed

situations. Some call the governments

need

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to come forward and tackle

such

unfair things, but I completely disagree

this

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with this

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action and I will explain why in

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essay.

Firstly

, the

high-income

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high income

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of those well-known people is determined by the market, I

belive

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believe

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their earning is directly

propotional

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proportional

to the value of their status, they have successfully gained public

recognitions

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recognition

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base

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on their abilities

,

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so

that

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they deserve to possess the revenue. I actually feel it is

unappropriate

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inappropriate

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for the government

intervene

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the

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rule of the

industry

determined by

market

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the market

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,

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because I

belive

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believe

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the enthusiasm

of

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for

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producing high-quality

works

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work

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is go

along with

their rewards,

therefore

the income

averange

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average

to some extent can bring negative impacts on the quality of the crafts,

this

is

also

a kind of loss for the audiences.

Secondly

, with the exception of

few

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masters, the risen

fame

period of many well-known entertainment celebrities is very short,

this

is

due to

the taste of the audiences often

changes

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, and people tend to feel bored after long-time attention to a star and become

interest

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in others,

as a result

, their departure from the public eye will

left

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the

fame

opportunity to others, which to some extent reflects the fairness of the

industry

, it will encourage those unnamed artists

work

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harder to prepare for

fame

,

this

is beneficial for the development of the

industry

,

thus

the government does not need to take any measure in terms of earning. In conclusion, I think the government should not take any action to balance the income of celebrities in the entertainment

industry

, because it will beat their

enthusiams

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enthusiasm

for

fame

and it will be adverse to the development of the

industry

.