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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2002, and projections for 2050.
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The bar chart depicts the percentage of the total
world
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population
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 in 4 different countries over 100 years starting from 1950.
Overall
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, it is evident that the statistics for the earth's
population
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 decreased for all countries except for
India
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. It is
also
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 noticeable that
India
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 was the only country where the capacity of the
world
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population
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 is expected to increase by 2050. Looking at the graph in more detail, in 1950 and 2002, China made up the greatest proportion of the
world
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population
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 despite a slight fall in its figures from approximately 23% to 20%. An akin situation could be noticeable in the rate of the
world
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 populace in Japan and the USA. Their data experienced a decline in the
population
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 of around 2% over the same period, with figures at around 2,5% and 5% respectively.
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, the opposite could be seen in
India
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, where the figure sharply grew by around 15% from 1950 to 17% in 2002.
On the other hand
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, in 2050, the figures for China and Japan are predicted to have a steep fall of around 15% and 2% respectively, whilst the figure for the USA is likely to remain unchanged, at 5%. Meanwhile, the proportion of residents residing in
India
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 is projected to continue rising to 19%
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words world, population, india with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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