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The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth Schooll from 2006 to the present. Summarise the informatio­n by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparion where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of library books read by boys and girls at Starmouth Schooll from 2006 to the present. Summarise the informatio­n by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparion where relevant.
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The graph gives us information about how many library
books
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 were read by
boys
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 and
girls
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 at Starmouth School between 2006 to 2012.
Overall
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, the
number
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 of
books
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 read by both genders increased during
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 period. In 2009,
boys
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 and
girls
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 reached a peak of just under 60
books
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,
while
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 in 2012 they achieve a minimum of 80
books
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. A closer look at the graph reveals that
boys
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 experience a drop in
books
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 read from 2006 to 2012. There is a marked decrease that occurred in 2012,
where
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when
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 the
number
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 of
boys
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 readers drop from 100 to 80
books
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.
On the other hand
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,
girls
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 experience a rise in
this
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 tendency, achieving a peak of 140
books
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 in 2012. There is a more significant rise considering the period 2010 to 2012, where we appreciate a strong growth in
girls
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' readers achieving from 40
books
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 to 140
books
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 read. We may forecast
this
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 tendency is expected to rise.
Although
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 the
number
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 of
boys
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 readers was higher than
girls
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 in 2009, the graph shows us a turnback in
this
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 pattern, where the
number
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 of
girls
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 experience an increase in the
number
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 of read
books
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words books, boys, girls, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 3 times.
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