Today the high sales of popular comsumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

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Nowadays, the authority of commercials demonstrates a great understanding of intake because of which they are sold without realising the needs of the association. I strongly agree that advertising has a lot of power in its hands and can sell unnecessary goods.

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,there is a belief that adders have the severe power to cause seizures in intakers. In my opinion, that trend holds great meaning for our community on account of social media. Because, on average, everybody spends approximately 2-3 hours every day on social media sites

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as Facebook or Instagram. Interestingly, the owners of businesses prefer to post commercials on networks than other ideas.

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, the new owner of McDonald's said that "if you are able to get attention from others, you will earn much more money than you do " and he advised making advertising on social media so that others, like us, will look at our product and be interested in it.

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, on account of these factors of humanity on the network, ads become a great part of our culture.

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, there is noticeable that all stuff bought by us is really needed by us. I believe, that each of us has bought substances we did not want to buy.

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, many organisations use the weaknesses of humanity for commercial gain. Something on the market is really interesting but not needed.

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, because they got attention, many people became interested. The things without meaning in civilization hold an attractive view and have an unusual appearance on account of which they will be sold to consumers.

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, my classmate, who is called Akylbek, bought the AirPods MAX PRO, which he regretted. because he did not understand the peculiarity of those headphones.

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he thought that he would buy the headphones from JBL.

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JBL costs three times less than AirPods, its quality is greater than that of AirPods. There are many products after a deal we deeply regret. In conclusion,

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the dominance of ads holds serious power, there is much stuff

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really not needed by people in the markets of our cities.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

350 words

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Today the high sales of popular comsumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

Include an introduction and conclusion

The best way to solve the traffic and transportation problem is to encourage people to live in cities rather than suburbs and countryside. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Nowadays university education is very expensive. Some people say that universities should reduce their fees, especially for the less fortunate stuvery spedents or those coming from rural areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The flowchart illustrates the production of coloured plastic paper clips in a small factory