Today the high sales of popular comsumer goods reflect the power of advertising and not the real needs of the society in which they are sold.

Nowadays, the authority of commercials demonstrates a great understanding of intake because of which they are sold without realising the needs of the association. I strongly agree that advertising has a lot of power in its hands and can sell unnecessary goods.     
Firstly
,there is a belief that adders have the severe power to cause seizures in intakers. In my opinion, that trend holds great meaning for our community on account of social media. Because, on average, everybody spends approximately 2-3 hours every day on social media sites
such
as Facebook or Instagram. Interestingly, the owners of businesses prefer to post commercials on networks than other ideas.
For example
, the new owner of McDonald's said that "if you are able to get attention from others, you will earn much more money than you do " and he advised making advertising on social media so that others, like us, will look at our product and be interested in it.
Moreover
, on account of these factors of humanity on the network, ads become a great part of our culture.     
Secondly
, there is noticeable that all stuff bought by us is really needed by us. I believe, that each of us has bought substances we did not want to buy.
However
, many organisations use the weaknesses of humanity for commercial gain. Something on the market is really interesting but not needed.
Then
, because they got attention, many people became interested. The things without meaning in civilization hold an attractive view and have an unusual appearance on account of which they will be sold to consumers.
For example
, my classmate, who is called Akylbek, bought the AirPods MAX PRO, which he regretted. because he did not understand the peculiarity of those headphones.
Then
he thought that he would buy the headphones from JBL.
Although
JBL costs three times less than AirPods, its quality is greater than that of AirPods. There are many products after a deal we deeply regret.      In conclusion, 
although
the dominance of ads holds serious power, there is much stuff
that is
really not needed by people in the markets of our cities.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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