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Some people think that all children should learn geography in school. However some others think that it is more important to learn subjects that are more relevant to life. What is your opinion?

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Nowadays, In our society
geography
 classes vanished in school and it has been replaced by other subjects that people value more relevant to children's instruction. Regarding the general level of ,instruction we had a sharp decrease among the new generation over time, especially if we are talking about
geography
 ,
in particular
 where the places are located
as well as
 a random notion of different countries. Based on
this
 sentence, my opinion has firm brief that
this
 kind of subject that everyone should learn to have a good prospection of the world. Despite that, the new technology system is fairly advanced now ,
thus
 , we can research all the knowledge we need on the web without any effort. indeed, for ,instance we have a lot of apps
such
 as google maps which we can use to reach any location.
As a result
, focusing on a new matter related more towards practices life may be the best option to improve other abilities that could be useful in a future children's education or job lifestyle like informatics , rights law or something about the media.
to conclude
, In light of that, I'm standing by my previous opinion,
Geography
 is valid as much as other subjects , even if the
last
 century has been overcome by innovation because learning that it could be a good way to practice and develop the human brain
in particular
 in a children's education phase. Indeed, the part of the brain that over time has been reduced by the absence of training our orientation sense is The hippocampus which could be replaced only with
geography
 knowledge.
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