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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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it is a fact that the biggest threat to the environment is humans themselves.
this
 essay will discuss the steps which governments and individuals should take to minimalise the damage to nature. there are two prominent causes of environmental pollution.
firstly
, excessive use of transport produces smoke.
In addition
 fumes from factories
also
 make the air quality miserable.
secondly
, the excessive usage of packing material and lack of recycling.
therefore
,
people
 produce more garbage than the capacity
of
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for
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 recycling.
this
 will create
worst
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the worst
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 situations in soil pollution , and in the sea as well.
therefore
, the government should take some firm steps to counter the situation by applying a green tax on private
vehicles
.
this
 will hamper the outgrowth of
vehicles
 on roads because they become expensive. another step government should take, by introducing an awareness programme on waste management
coupled with
 better infrastructure for recycling the debris.
As a result
 the environment, mainly land becomes junk free.
nevertheless
,
people
 can
also
 play a vital role in conserving the climate by opting for public transportation in place of
vehicles
. it will save the environment
as well as
 their precious time.
in addition
,
people
 can choose reusable material for packing over plastic.
As a
result
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 plastic waste will decrease.
thus
, recycling becomes easy with less cost
involving
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 to do so.
to sum up
, the government can make
people
 aware of recycling and applying duty on private
vehicles
.
whereas
, individuals can use public transport and use conventional packing material.
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