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the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009

the chart below shows the aid form six developed countries to devloping countries from 2008-2009
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This
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 bar graph gives us pieces of information about
aid
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 in $
billion
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 that six developed countries received from 2008 to 2010.
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, we can see that The United States of America is by far away the country that received the most
aid
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 over these 3 years with a gap of 10 $
billion
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 with the second country on the chart in 2010. In these 3
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 there is no debate that the Us received much more
aid
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 than the other countries. In 2009
aid
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 was approximately 22 $
billion
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 before slightly decreasing to 20 $
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 but
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 raised again in 2010
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 25 $
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aid
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. Germany seems to be the second country. Indeed Germany knew a gradually grow of
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 over these 3 years with
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 equal to 10, 14 and 15 $
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 in 2008, 2009 and 2010 respectively. Uk and Japan received average
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 of just over 10 $
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 from 2008 to 2010. In
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,
Netherland
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 and Sweden were the countries receiving less
aid
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 with a peak in 2009 reaching approximately 9 $
billion
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 for both.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words aid, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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