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«Prevention is better than cure». Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest into preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

#«prevention #cure» #diseases #measures
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Finding cures and health treatments are highly expensive compared to preventative actions that could be taken in order to avoid medical expenses.
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, the majority of illnesses that affect most of the population could be prevented by implementing nutrition programs. Diabetes, cardiovascular-related and digestive-related problems
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 as colon cancer among others are caused by a poor and deficient diet. Namely, The excess of sugar, refined flour, saturated fats and lack of fibre in our daily food lead to most of the conditions above mentioned.
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, a change in feeding habits can be achieved by educating people which can result in a better life quality.
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, an educational plan in order to create awareness regarding the importance of nutrition might be significantly less costly than long-term treatments and hospitalization. Namely, a television campaign, school workshops or subjects dedicated to instructing adults and kids on how to wisely choose and prepare their meals are great alternatives for prevention at a reduced cost.
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, The price of colon cancer therapy for just a few patients can be equivalent to a TV campaign. 
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, I personally agree with the fact that investing in prevention costs less than healing.
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, the expenses incurred by curing most of the common and deadly illnesses could be reduced by educating the population on how to take care of themselves through well-balanced nutrition.
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