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The number of older people is increasing. Some people think it will cause problems in their countries, others believe this group is important to the society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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A rise in the number of aged
people
 has been seen in
the
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society
. It is to be believed
by
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some
people
 that
this
 age group of
people
 does not contribute to
the
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society
 by any means which will hamper the growth of the country. I have a biased opinion about the above statement which is discussed
further
. Old
people
 are the root of the family and they have been through various situations in their
life
. Their
life
 lessons matter even more than the books and online knowledge. Through their experience, they can guide us in our
life
 which can lead us to become successful.
Moreover
, they remind us about the rich culture and traditions which plays an important factor in driving our
life
. To add to
this
, elderly
people
 stay at home to take care of the house and children
while
 youths can be out earning or enjoying their
life
. They even incorporate good values in our children which school fails to do.
On the other hand
, they can not contribute towards the economic growth of the country as compared to the younger generations. The reason for
this
 is that they are not that educated
due to
 the lack of an education system during their time.
Also
, nowadays, technology is associated with everything
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 which they are not well versed.
Due to
 all of these reasons, they fail to contribute towards the development of the nation.
To conclude
, I believe there needs to be a balance
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 every age group in
the
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society
. Everyone has their contribution in a different aspect. Even though they can not be a part of a country's development process, they are important to
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society
 in a different way.
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