Advertising influence people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solution should be given?

Advertising influence people to buy things such as clothes and shoes. What are the problems caused by that? What solution should be given?
Advertising in today’s world affects consumer purchases of goods
for example
equipment and clothing.
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to
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promotion is one of the main ways to market goods.
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,
in
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advertisements have some basic issues
from
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the human’s
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human’s
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mind.
Such
as we mainly buy
Coca cola
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and Pepsi among
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different
beverage
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, because the
Coca cola
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and
the
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Pepsi spend
much
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money
for
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ads
, as if they do not show their products
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weeks, we will
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about
Coca cola
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, else
another fabrics
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too.
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,
in
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sites and social media advertise gambling games and some publicities are not for children, because they add obscene things to some advertisements.
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publicities may have software
virus
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.
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again, if say in
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simple words, even if half of the movie is
ads
, how angry we will be
.
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Secondly
, in my opinion, every problem can be resolved, even the issue with advertising.
For instance
, get rid of them. Not to see, not to hear and not to read. Unfortunately, if you are not Mowgli,
then
you will not be able to completely eliminate promotion from your life. But that can be significantly limited. In addition, the government did
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allow to show
gambling
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games
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any social
medias
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media
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or sites. If
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tv,
social
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networks force
to
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watch publicity, you can complain
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them. Else, if we want to non spread software
virus
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, we shall improve
security
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of
internet
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. In conclusion, we can not stop
ads
, as most
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humans
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, tv and social services
gat
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get
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money from promotion.
Also
, the
ads
can help us to get information
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equipment or clothes
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