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In the past, lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays, new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach?

#lectures #method #numbers #students #technology #approach
Nowadays,
technology
 has a wide application in many aspects of
the
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life living and
education
 is no exception. Recently, traditional forms of
education
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 no longer the main method, it has been improved by new
technology
 to
extent
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 options and contents for
students
.
This
 trend would create certainly benefits but there will
also
 be some drawbacks. In the hand of advantage, cutting-edge
technology
is apply
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for
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education
bring
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 many
lively
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lessons
 for
students
. Teachers can use
powerpoint
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PowerPoint
 to present their slides with varied pictures and sound that
makes
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students
 easily absorb their
lessons
.
Moreover
, there are more options
about
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the method
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method
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 of
education
 for choosing.
Students
 can register to learn offline or online
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 on their time management or receptive ability. E-learning offers
them
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opportunity
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 to approach many people in over the world who can give them new valuable knowledge
that is
 limited by traditional
method
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.
In
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 the other hand, learning online
also
 has some drawbacks.
Learners
 are distracted by several other online factors.
For example
, some messages or advertisements are popped up
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attention
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 of
learners
 so it makes
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interruption
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 in their
lessons
.
Additionally
,
learners
are depend
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 on
technology
equipments
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 and internet connection.
Students
 have to prepare
laptop
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 or smartphone with
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 internet connection to join an online class. If lack one in both that conditions, the class will be
failure
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.
Learners
 can not access e-learning platforms if there is no laptop or cellphone.
Also
, they can not receive enough content
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lessons
 if the internet connection is flickering. So it is counterproductive.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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