Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and enigneers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The phenomenon of
people
who have professional skills should stay local after graduation or
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them
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the freedom to choose work for other
countries
has aroused wide concern among various circles. Divergent as
people
's views on
this
issue in question may be, I personally believe that the
grovenment
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government
should allow folks can make their own decision. On one hand, if those experts have been enforced to stay and contribute to where they are educated, those
countries
would make sure those talents will use those skills and
knowledages
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knowledge
knowledges
they learned to the local in order to push their national development growth
contiunely
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continually
.
For instance
,
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of medical staff is a communal problem around the world. More new doctors would alleviate
this
situation which can prevent the lowering of industrial production by healthy problems of local
people
.
As a result
, those
countries
can have a stable development trend.
On the other hand
, I believe that the local
grovenment
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government
governments
should allow those professionals to decide to stay or leave. The main reason is that the country
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responded to
train
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those experts would have
benefits
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from
this
. To illustrate, those
people
who decide to develop their career path in other
countries
can be seen as a trade of talents between
countries
in turn the providing
people
side can ask for help in the future in case any unpredictable problem or disasters occur.
Therefore
,
countries
should encourage the public to work in foreign
countries
if they want to. Under
this
line of thinking, it seems to me that
enforeing
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enforcing
talents to work for the country where they received the training can remain
the
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local development.
However
,
countries
can gain a commitment of support by providing training for professionals.
Thus
, I believe that we should not make
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the decision
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decision
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for them and
this
can benefit
to
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each involved country.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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