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the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015

the chart below shows the value of one country's exports in various categories during 2015 and 2016. The tables shows the percentage in each category of exports in 2016 compared to 2015
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The bar chart illustrates the
earnings
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 from the
export
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 of various categories
such
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 as Petroleum
products
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, Engineered
goods
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, Gemsand jewellery, Agricultural
products
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 and Textiles in one country in the years 2015 and 2016.The table shows the proportion of change experienced in income.
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, the highest amount was received from the
export
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 of Petroleum things ,
although
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 the least money earns from Textiles. In 2015,
export
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 profits from petroleum
products
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 were $50
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billions
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billion
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,
then
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 a 3% decrease occurred in 2016, which was the highest in both years. The earn from Engineered
goods
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 was almost $55
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billions
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billion
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, which was second in
export
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earnings
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. After one year,
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8.5% rise occurred in engineered
goods
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export
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earnings
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.
Furthermore
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,
export
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earnings
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 from Gems and jewellery were almost $ 42
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billions
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billion
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 in 2015,
while
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 they declined to 40 at end of the period. Agricultural
goods
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export
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 earning was almost $30
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billions
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billion
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 in both years. Textile
earnings
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 were around $ 25 billion
however
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,
at the end
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 of the period, it was approximately the same as agricultural
products
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words earnings, export, products, goods, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Exports, categories, value, goods, services
  • Trends, increase, decrease, percentage, compared
  • Significant, minimal, fluctuation, remained stable
  • Domestic product, international trade, economic indicators
  • Manufacturing, agriculture, technology, textiles
  • Revenue, economic growth, trade deficit
  • Forecast, predict, anticipate, implications
  • Global market, exchange rate, competitiveness
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