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The percentage of people who accessed news from 4 sources from 1995 and projection to 2025

#percentage #people #news #sources #projection
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 of sources :
TV
 , newspapers , radio and the
internet
 has changed
since
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 1995 until 2025 . In general , with the development of
the
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technology , It’s very easy to realize that updating
on
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the
internet
 has become more and more popular and
this
 is projected to continue .
However
 , the another is contrast and the gap between the
Internet
 and another will surely decrease . In 1995 , the dominant was remained by
TV
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 which took up 70% of residents using
it
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,
this
 index went down about 10% from 70% to under 60% in 2000 there wasn’t any
change
 between 2000 and 2010 .
This
 is expected to continue to decrease to under 50% which is the lowest score
of
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TV
 in 2025 . Radio and
Newspaper
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 are almost
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in
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any
years
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. They were regarded
like
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 the second most popular in 1995 and took up about 55% of citizens . They continually decreased between 2000 and 2020 , from 50% to 30% . They are predicted to keep
this
 index in 2025. The biggest
change
 is the
Internet
 which there was no
peole
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people
 using
it
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in 1995 . In 2000 , It wasn’t better than
1995
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 on account of being used by just nearly 1% .
However
 , from the beginning of
21st
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 century to 2010 , It had a considerable
change
 from 1% to 30% and
this
change
 predicted that The
Internet
 would gain
dominant
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 in near future .
Moreover
 , from 2010 to 2020 , The
internet
 increased
about
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 10% and in 2025 ,It is projected to reach about 57% , higher 7% than
the
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TV
 at the same time.
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