Some people think scientific research should focus on solving world health problems. Others think that there are more important issues. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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A harmful of
people
assume that scientific
research
ought to apply itself to deal with
problem
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problems
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related to
health
on a global scale. Meanwhile, others believe
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there
are more
importaint
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important
issues
worth focusing on. In
this
essay, I will discuss both sides. For the first statement, I believe that it is absolutely true. In
this
day and age, more and more
people
are prone to severe diseases
such
as cholera, cancers, etc.
some
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of them are perháp incurable,
deteriooate
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deteriorate
deteriorated
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myriad of lives and bring about the
fiancial
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financial
burden to the family or the patient.
According to
the
date
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data
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, the death toll has gone up
considerally
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considerably
since the beginning of the 21st century up till now by
virture
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virtue
of those diseased.
For example
, recently the outbreak of Covd-19 pandemic, at first there were no
vaccine
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vaccines
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and proper ways of treatment
to
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patients. Thank
to
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the
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scientist they have discovered many ways to prevent and even eradicate it. If more scientific
researches
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are taken place on
world
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the world
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health
problem
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problems
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, there
are
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more
oppunities
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opportunities
to save
lives
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the lives
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of
people
all over the
world
.
On the other hand
,
world
health
problems
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not the only things scientific
research
should focus on. First of all, the problem
raising
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the red warming, posing a threat to not only humans
,
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but
also
the Earth, it is
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eviromental
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environmental
issues
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issue
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. It is actually serious. It
inclued
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included
includes
air pollution, soil pollution, greenhouse effects, etc and perhaps the most serious one is global warming. The outcome of these
issues
are disasters, all of which stem from
the
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human's
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excessie
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excessive
excesses
activitíe
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activity
.
Moreover
,
scientist
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research
should concentrate on
even
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ways to improve the
livingg
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living
standard
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standards
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. There are still tons of homeless
people
, and the unemployment rate is still exceeding the average.
To sum up
, I believe that
scitentific
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scientific
research
should definitely care for
the
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world
health
problems, but not
to
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ignore other significant
issues
posing threats to humans.
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