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Due to extinction of species enviroment is polluting.

#extinction #species #enviroment
Problems are faced by different
species
 at the moment , most of the rare
species
 has been extinct in
very
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 near future. Cutting
of
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down
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 forests
results
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 difficulty in the survival of different birds and animals.Deforestation has caused a rapid incline in
species
 of different enimals.No proper
environment
 cause unhygienic growth .Another factor , to keep
into
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 mind, hunters feel enjoyed hunting
to
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rare
species
 . Many governments
has
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 put a ban on hunting rare
species
 but special laws should be made to control the extinction of rare
species
. Habitats of forest areas feel difficulty in living when on the vast ground there is deforestation. With Rapid Deforestation, the decline in
species
 is
also
 resulting in changing
environment
.Bats
of
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the
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Madagascar,Area of India, prey on different insects from rice fields , keeping them free from the decay of that particular crop.Same
as
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 the case with other
species
 of birds and animals who facilitates the
environment
 with our unknowing ways .
On the other hand
, there are other factors
also
 include
in
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 environmental change like if we mention rapid growth of the industrial areas and chemicals coming out of their chimneys
also
 polluting our homeland .Consumption of fuels by vehicles emits Carbon monoxide which is the most dangerous element for the
environment
 damaging the ozone layers.Earth is facing environmental problems because of the damaging layers of the ozone layer. In conclusion, the Extinction of
species
 and other factors are playing their part in damaging
earth's
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 crust.Steps should be taken on large to avoid these situations.The global environmental corporation is running to overcome the different situation which disturbs the Earth's space.
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