The pie chart shows the main reason why agricultural land becomes less productive.
The charts illustrate the information on crucial causes of worldwide agricultural
land
degradation and each country's main reasons in North America, Europe
and Oceania during the 1990s.
Overall
, over-grazing accounted for the largest proportion in this
chart followed by deforestation
while
other
comprised the smallest. Correct pronoun usage
others
Also
, the most degraded region was Europe
. Europe
's main reason was deforestation
.
Looking at the first graph, it is clear that
over-grazing was the most serious reason of
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for
land
corruption at 35%. However
, the ratio of deforestation
and over-cultivation was roughly the same with deforestation
at 30% and 28% each. The figure of
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for
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the other
other
was the smallest and it is 7 times as little as over-grazing.
Correct pronoun usage
others
According to
the second graph, North America had the least land
deterioration among the three areas at 5% while
Europe
was the most degraded at 23%. Also
, the most significant reason was different by
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apply
regions
. North America was affected Fix the agreement mistake
region
from
over-cultivation at 3.3% and Change preposition
by
Europe
's main cause of land
degradation was deforestation
at 9.8%. Finally
, Oceania was mainly affected from
over-grazing at 11.3%Change preposition
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