some people say that devoting one;s tome to family activities is more important than spending time working. Others believe that dedicating one's tome to work is more important. Dicuss both these wiews and give your own opinion.
There are differing opinions regarding that spending
time
with their family or working. In the limited time
, people
should strike the balance between family relationships and careers. I firmly believe that connecting relationship is more vital.
On the one hand, working is important to support the daily demanding. If people
couldn’t content financial support, family happiness can not be satisfied. However
, some people
work
for achievement. To reach a higher position or operate their own career, people
devote their whole life to it and ignore their families. For instance
, parents sometimes miss their kid's growth periods just because they are busy with work
. Most of the parents were regretting time
cannot be through back and the parent-child relationship grew apart.
Nevertheless
, in my perspective, spending time
with family is more valuable than work
. Children will not judge their parent's success or not. What they only care about is do their parents accompany them. Family is the place that gives the mind- supporting bringing happiness. According to
the family poll. The majority of respondents ranked family time
over work
when asked about the things which bring satisfaction to their lives. People
usually burden high pressure in their work
.
In conclusion, time
used for work
is undeniably curial for financial support. However
, spending time
with family is a priority for me because they are my whole life.Submitted by CC
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite