THE FIRST CHART BELOW GIVES INFORMATION ABOUT THE M AND ONEY SPENT BY BRITISH PARENTS ON THEIR CHILDRENS SPORTS BETWEEN 2008 AND 2014.THE SECOND CHGART SHOWS THE NUMBER OF CHILDREN WHO PARTICIPATED IN THREE SPORTS IN BRITAIN OVER THE SAME TIME PERIOD.

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The first line graph depicts the data regarding the average monthly amount spent on juvenile

sports

by parents in Britain .Another reveals information on the number of pupils who took part in three different

sports

.The data is calibrated in

pounds

and millions.

Overall

, British parents spent the maximum amount in 2014 as compared to the other years

whereas

a large total of children participated in football whilst to the other two

sports

. At a fleeting glance,in 2008 British parents spent an average of 20

pounds

on their children's

sports

activities.The money spent on juvenile play elevated gradually over the period of six years.In 2012,the money spent on

sports

was more was approximately 28

pounds

as compared to 2010.

Moreover

,by 2014 the average monthly amount had surged to just over 30

pounds

. Probing ahead,in 2008 nearly 8

million

children played football

while

only 2

million

pupils enrolled in swimming clubs and less than 1

million

practised in athletics.

Furthermore

, in 2012 5

million

pupils took part in athletics,

in contrast

almost 8

million

enrolled in football.

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Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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173 words

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