The map show Southside,a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. Summarise the indormation by selecting and repoting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map show Southside,a shopping mall, as it is now, and plans for its development. 

Summarise the indormation by selecting and repoting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The two maps show the shopping
mall
, Southside, in its current form and its proposed expansion.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the plan is to extend the
centre
and its car
park
into nearby green space to allow for more stores and a greater focus on fashion at the expense of eateries and space for activities, Currently, Southside
Mall
consists of only a supermarket, department store, cinemas, a noodle shop and cafe with a children's play area and toilet facilities. To the east of the
centre
, there is a golf course that backs onto a
park
,
while
to the south, there is a fitness
centre
and a car
park
opposite the
mall
entrance.
According to
the proposal, only the supermarket, toilet and entrance will remain at the original site. The most significant development will be the extension of the
mall
in an easterly direction, where it will overtake land previously occupied by the golf course and
park
. The fitness
centre
too will be demolished to make way for the car
park
which will more than double in size. Inside the
mall
itself,
although
the proposed renovation will allow for more stores, the department store will remain, increasing in size and acquiring its own entrance. A cosmetics and gift shop will be added,
as well as
a beauty salon. There will,
however
, be nowhere to eat as plans show the cafe will become an information
centre
.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words mall, centre, park with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remain" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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