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Band 7.5

Write a letter to a friend who will come to your country to work for 6 months. In your letter, you should: •recommend a city •suggest a few jobs that your friend could do •give some opinions about making friends with the locals.

#friend #country #work #months #•recommend #city #•suggest #jobs #•give #friends #locals
Dear John, I hope you are doing great. I heard the news about your plan, your idea to visit Switzerland is brilliant. I believe six months should be enough to see the most important places. In my opinion, you should stay in Geneva, it is a beautiful city
furthermore
 the official language is French. I remember you tried to learn
this
 language in high school, I am sure you still remember something. Geneve have a lot of job opportunities in the technology sector, and you will not have any problem finding a good position,
last
 week I saw an open position for a software developer in Swiss Com and what is more important in Google. In the end, little advice, people in Geneva are difficult to interact with, you have to be patient and everything will be ok, but remember, you are not in the United States and people do not like to express their feelings. I am looking forward to seeing you Best Wishes, George.
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single idea per paragraph
The letter is well-structured, but try to put each new idea into a separate paragraph to enhance clarity.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is friendly and appropriate but could be slightly more polished and refined.
complete response
You've effectively covered all the points required: recommending a city, suggesting jobs, and offering advice on making friends with locals.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriate and friendly, adding a personal touch to your letter.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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