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Nowadays, there is a trend that reports of media focus on problems and emergencies rather than positive development. Some people think it is harmful to individuals and to society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The question of whether emergencies or positive stories should be featured on the
news
 has been a recent topic of debate.
Although
 I agree with the idea that
this
 trend adversely impacts individuals and
society
, its advantages should be mentioned.
First,
we should admit that the
news
 on emergencies can save lives and reduce damage, especially during natural disasters.
For instance
, the
media
 often updates viewers on breaking
news
 about hurricane assaults or earthquakes, or the
media
 frequently announces an emergency declaration. In
this
 way, the
people
 who are in danger may take corresponding actions to stay safe right away. The best way to alert individuals to prevent and protect themselves is to report
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bad situations including drug trafficking, corruption, bribery, sexual harassment, and racism.
Additionally
,
news
 stories about criminals and their penalties can help inform the public about justice, deter individuals from committing crimes, and ultimately decrease the crime rate.
On the other hand
, a higher frequency of
news
 stories focusing on negative aspects of
society
 can have detrimental effects on
people
’s mental states.
For example
,
news
 about terrorism and war has become so common in the
media
 that some
people
 may hesitate to travel abroad for fear of a terrorist attack.
Secondly
, it can
also
 lead
people
 to misunderstand many aspects of
society
.
For example
, many tabloids,
such
 as 14 Channel in Vietnam, have always focused on exploiting the scandals of celebrities, which can mislead the public into believing in the flaws of Vietnamese showbiz.
However
, in reality, it is an industry where many
people
 are contributing many great values to
society
. In conclusion, there are legitimate reasons for the
media
 to report on all issues,
although
 the accompanying negative impacts need to be considered.
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