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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.
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anout
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about
 the
number
 of shops that closed and the
number
 of new sports that opened in one country from 2011 to 2018. Looking at the graph as a whole,the
number
 of shop
closures
 and openings are
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a slignificant
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slignificant
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significant
 movement up and down between 2011 and 2018. In detail,the proportion of openings from about 8500 in 2011.It is the highest proportion in
line
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 graph.
However
,
slignificant
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significant
 a drop from 2011,
then
 rose steadily
a
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 increase until 2014.After that,the
number
 of openings
remaind
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remind
remain
remained
 all the most
coustant
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constant
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 about 4000 between 2015 and 2017,
then
 decreased
at
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 about 3000in 2018.The
number
 of
closures
move
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 up and down steadily between 2011 and 2014.As you can see.the proportion of
closures
 reach a low of around 800 in 2015,
then
 suddenly increase
more
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 than double in 2016.After
that
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 the rate of
closures
remaind
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remained
remind
remain
 all the most
coustant
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constant
 at around 5000 from 2016 to 2018.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, closures with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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