The bar chart below shows the hour per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007
The bar chart below illustrates the hour each week
this
adolescents spare doing precise facilities in Chester Change the determiner
these
from
between 2002 and 2007
The chart gives information about some activities Change preposition
apply
such
as going to
Change preposition
by
bus
, watching Add an article
the bus
Correct article usage
the televesion
televesion
, shopping, doing homework, doing sport, watching DVDs and Correct your spelling
television
also
bowling. There is a huge rate in
watching television for the reason during at five years and Change preposition
of
also
the most famous activities. In contrast
, bowling was less
curious facility than others.
Correct article usage
a less
Firstly
, a period of time watching television used by people and in 2007 reached a peak so been just under fourty
. By 2002, that number was 25% the next stage tremendously Correct your spelling
forty
four
growth
and became 36%. Replace the word
grew
Although
, watching DVDs was second place in
Change preposition
on
list
, in 2004 the quantity hit a peak so Add an article
the list
number
had been 20%. Another activity was shopping that third place in Correct article usage
the number
chart
, in 2007 reached a peak and Add an article
the chart
rate
had 15%.
Correct article usage
the rate
Secondly
, doing sport, doing homework and the
bowling Correct article usage
apply
were not choose
many people, Change the verb form
were not chosen
were not choosing
however
these quantities maximal level became by 2002, 12%, 10% and 5% respectively. Add the comma(s)
,however
Nevertheless
, by 2007 doing homework was minimal level 6
% Change preposition
of 6
thus
, doing sport
and bowling were not useful for Fix the agreement mistake
sports
humas
as interest rate Correct your spelling
humans
human
decline
Wrong verb form
declined
accordingly
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