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There is more and more outrage and anger common in society today. Why is this? Is this a positive or a negative development?

#outrage #anger #society #development
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Due to
this
,modern era,the volume of enmity and annoyance is enmity and annoy are inclined as compared to the
last
 few years. The main cause is technology
as well as
 it is pessimistic development.
This
 is explained in upcoming paragraphs. The main reason for enmity is the usage of electronic gadgets because people spend quality time on social media sites.They do not want to talk to their family members
due to
this
, and their emotions become irritated when someone tries to communicate with them.
Additionally
, the world suffered a pandemic
due to
 covid. At
this
,moment folks stay home the majority of work and education becomes online which leads to loneliness it results, frustration and anxiety. Moving forward, anger leads to negativity towards society. People commit crimes and violence
this
 impact the nation's laws
as well as
 society's peace.
Moreover
, the divorce rate is inclined as compared to the
last
 decades. The main dilemma is a lack of tolerance in the family which gives birth to anger its impacts children's behaviour as well badly. In the epilogue, it is discerned that distractive emotions are highly effective in
this
 point community. People should avoid anger and try to spend some moments doing meditation
this
 activity relaxes the mind.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Outrage culture
  • Amplification
  • Economic hardship
  • Sensationalist
  • Polarization
  • Constructive outcomes
  • Social frustration
  • Divisiveness
  • Societal norms
  • Historical context
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