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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features ,and make comparision where relevent.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who are visiting a particular Caribbean island over seven
years
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.
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, regarding the
number
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 of tourists who are visiting the island is significantly considerable.The
number
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 of
visitors
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 who are staying on the reef showed a great
number
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 in the first year,
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 it declined steadily during the
last
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 few
years
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,
In contrast
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, to the
number
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 of
visitors
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 who are staying on cruise ships , it increased dramatically all over that period .Totally, the two kinds of
visitors
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 revealed a dramatic growth over these
years
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. The first type of
visitors
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 who are staying on cruise ships started approximately with a quarter
million
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visitors
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 in 2010 ,
then
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 it rose slightly in 2011 to reach half a
million
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 , and after
that
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 it fell steadily to reach again the same rate as the previous year.
However
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, their
number
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 increased gradually to reach the highest point of 2
million
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visitors
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 in 2017. the second type of
visitors
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 who are staying on the island began with around 0.8
million
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visitors
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 in 2010,
then
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 it remained constant until the next year,
then
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 it increased gradually in 2011 to reach the maximum of 1.5
million
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visitors
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 in 2013 .For the
last
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 two
years
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 ,their
number
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 fluctuated to attain 1.5
million
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visitors
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 .In general, the total
number
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 of
visitors
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 to Caribbean islands grew considerably to reach around 3.5
million
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 travellers in 2017.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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