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Many people argue that in order to improve educational quality, high school students are encouraged to make comments or even criticism on their teachers. Other think it will lead to loss of respect and discipline in the classroom. Discuss both views and give your Opinion.

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While
 some folks argue that
children
 are inspired to give
comments
 and criticism
on
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teachers
 to increase
quality
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 towards education, other believe that it
decrease
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 their
respect
 and discipline in the
class
. In my opinion, I consider that
students
 can
loss
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 their
respect
 and discipline towards
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the teacher
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teacher
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teachers
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, if they are commenting and criticizing
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their
teachers
. On the one hand, some people think that to increase educational performance
students
 are uplifted to make
comments
 and criticism
on
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 their
students
. To commence with,
students
 who are new in the school and want to learn something new
then
 they are
started
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 to comment and
to
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criticise the
teacher
.
For example
, in computer programming
class
students
 make
comments
 to their
teacher
 about learning new ideas after the
class
. Another reason is that
teacher
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teachers
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 can not correct the
students
what
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for what
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 they do wrong.
As a result
,
children
 are starting criticising
to
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their
teacher
 to learn
their
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 mistakes.
On the other hand
, it is often believed that making
comments
 and criticism can lead to
lose
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losing
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 their esteem and discipline and I agree.
First
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 reason is that
children
, who are behaving badly towards
teachers
, are hated by everyone
from
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 the school.
Therefore
, those
children
 stay alone in
classroom
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the classroom
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 and
this
 lead to them to think bad things.
For instance
,
children
 who are staying alone in the
class
 always
commenting
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comment
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 on other
students
 ,especially girls and
teachers
.
Furthermore
, those
students
 are making
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of mistakes in their assignments and exams.
Due to
this
,
students
 are irritated by
teacher's
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the teacher's
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 words and say some bad
comments
 to them.
As a result
, they lose their
respect
. In conclusion,
while
 people may vary in their opinion between making
comments
 and losing
respect
 , I think that
children
 do not
commenting
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comment
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 and
criticizing
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criticise
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to
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apply
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their
teachers
 because these behaviours lead
to
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them
in
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on
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wrong
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the wrong
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 path in the future.
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