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Some people think scientific research should focus on solving world health problems. Others think that there are more important issues. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, with the strong development of 4.0 technology,
people
's lives are rich and diverse.
Along with
 that development
is
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 the constant efforts of
people
 and to do that, the core issue we need is
health
. Some
people
 think that scientific research should focus on solving world
health
 problems. Others think there are more important issues. So in
this
essay
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 I will discuss them.
Health
 is considered
as
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the most precious thing in human life. Having
health
 is having everything. Only when we have good
health
 can we successfully complete the tasks as expected
.
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 Those who are unlucky enough to get sick will fall into a difficult situation and have to rely on
people
 around a lot. But
along with
health
, the surrounding factors
also
 contribute not small.
For example
, the natural
enviroment
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environment
also
 greatly affects human life. Or inventions or
people
 around a lot. But
along with
health
, the surrounding factors
also
 contribute not small.
For example
, the natural environment
also
 greatly affects human life. Or inventions or phenomena that have not been resolved will
also
contritue
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contribute
 to the development of the country. In conclusion, I agree with the idea of solving world
heath
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health
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 problems, but
besides
 that, it still
need
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 to be combined with other important factors to create a balance for both.
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