Learning about the past has no value for those of us living in the present. To what extent do you agree or disagree

These days, there is a controversy about studying
about
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the past. Some
people
think it is an unnecessary task because the information about the past is
unvaluable
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invaluable
for modern
people
.
However
, I
confirmly
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can firmly
confirm
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believe that it is important for our lives because of several reasons, which will be explained in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, many similar accidents
occur
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repeatedly over
the
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many years.
Thus
, if
people
know about them, it will be easier to find a solution.
For example
, in
1990s
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, there was a ship accident in Korea,
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that making
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making
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various victims.
Then
,
the
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similar incident occurred in 2014. The ship named Sewoel
wrecked
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while
going to
the
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Jeju
island
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as
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on
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a
school's
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field trip.
However
,
people
had not learnt about the previous one, failing to rescue many students. If
people
had been educated about that in advance, the number of victims would
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in that accident. On top of that, as the world became globalised, many countries have been linked
each
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other
since
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in the past.
Thus
, it is essential to know the past to behave appropriately to other countries to keep good relationships with them.
For instance
, the 6.25 war was provoked in Korea in 1950. Even though many foreigners were irrelevant
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it, they took part in it to help Korea. Korean citizens should learn about
this
information
continously
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continuously
and keep expressing appreciation for them. All things considered, some
people
can
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think learning about the past is not a worthy thing to live in the modern period.
However
, by getting many
peices
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pieces
of information from the past,
people
can get methods to resolve problems and know the suitable ways to treat other countries.
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