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today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. what are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit places?

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The phenomenon of an increasing number of people who like to travel to places with extreme weather has aroused wide concern among various circles.
While
it is clear that
this
 trend brings obvious benefits to tourists, it is
also
 true to say it may bring disadvantages as well. On one hand, there is a myriad of benefits of travelling in places where conditions are difficult. Probably the first popping into mind is that people can have a unique experience that cannot taste from other normal areas
such
 as living in an extremely cold environment like the Antarctic and the Arctic.
For example
, they can try to heat their drinks by putting them into a fridge because the temperature on the outside is much lower than the inside of the fridge. It is something that you can only do with an extremely low temperature.
On the other hand
, there are certain disadvantages and challenges that tourists are likely to face when they are visiting those regions. The most significant one is that they may get sick or hurt by the extreme environment.
For instance
, if you walk in a desert where excessively hot and dry, and surrounded by sand which makes people easier get illusory, your body may unable to adapt to those conditions in turn make you get sick and hurt easily.
Therefore
, it is not a place that suitable for everyone to travel to. Under
this
 line of thinking,
although
 having a journal in those places brings us some special experience, it may make us sick or get hurt.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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