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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Countries
 are becoming more and more similar because
people
 are able to buy the same
products
 anywhere in the
world
.
while
 I think is a negative
development
. on the one hand ,there have some advantages
Countries
 becoming more and more similar because
people
 are able to buy the same
products
 anywhere in the
world
.
firstly
,
people
 are able to buy the same
products
 anywhere in the
world
 which can reduce cultural differences,
while
 enhancing
world
 cooperation which can promote domestic industries closely associated with other foreign
countries
 ,
then
 it can help the industries revolution
also
 improve the global economy
development
 .
secondly
,
Countries
 are becoming more and more similar it help built a multi-cultural
world
 and reduce the global conflict,
therefore
, avoiding war and good for
people
 well-being.
finally
 ,it can promote cultural exchange
moreover
 it can attract more tourists to travel which help domestic tourism
development
.
on the other hand
 ,there have some benefits ,but I think it has more advantages .
firstly
,
Countries
 are becoming more and more similar which might
people
 erode their cultural identity because they are easier influenced by other
countries
' cultures .
secondly
, it reduces cultural diversity,
therefore
 ,it will be replaced by dominate cultural that harm for country
development
 ,and
also
 residents might reduce the sense of national identity and sense of belonging.
thirdly
, if
people
 all over the
world
 use the same items they may lack their own character,and impede national cultural inheritance. in conclusion . I think
Countries
 are becoming more and more similar because
people
 are able to buy the same
products
 anywhere in the
world
 is a negative
development
 .
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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