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Some people say that in all levels of education from primary school to universities too much tine is spend on learning than facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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Practical
skills
 are an essential part of working life. Some people think that the stage of education from primary
school
 to university spending too much time on learning.
However
, I agree with those who feel
students
 are less prepared for practical
skills
 in
school
 for two main reasons. The first reason is an increase in unemployment. Unemployment seems a big issue in
this
 modern era. Many people are hard to find jobs because they lack
skills
.
However
, it happened because they are not used to
practice
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practising
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 their
skills
 in
school
 and the
school
 offers too much material. For illustration,
students
 can not operate software very well because they only learned the theory of computers. The second reason is they can not compete with others. Competing become a part of human lives. People need to compete with others to become the better version of themselves.
Moreover
, focusing too much on theory will affect the student's academic performance.
For instance
,
students
 who lack practice at
school
 can not compete with
students
 that already learned it.
To sum up
, practical
skills
 are the most needed especially for
students
' future. By providing more practical,
students
 can easily understand the material. It will be very helpful to decrease the number
ofunemployments
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of unemployment
 and increase their ability.
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