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The way many people interact with each other nowadays has dramatically changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected types of human relationship? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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It is apparent that modern
technologies
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 have had an impact on communication between
people
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 nowadays, and they have affected
people
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’s relationships in many aspected. From my point of view, these
technologies
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 offer both positive and negative effects. Modern
technologies
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such
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 as computers, mobiles and
Internet
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the Internet
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 have been playing an important role
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people
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’s relationships in personal life, education and business.
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, many
people
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 use social networks like
facebook
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 and Instagram to keep in touch with family and
friends
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, to make new
friends
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 and to find
people
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 who share common interests.
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, Internet services help students exchange knowledge wider and search for information more conveniently.
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, services like
skype
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Skype
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 create new possibilities for
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the relationship
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relationship
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relationships
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 between students and teachers. A good example is that a student can now take
video
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 lessons with a teacher. A good example is that a student can now take
video
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 lessons with a teacher, living in a different city or country.
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, telephones and
video
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 conference services allow business
people
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 to interact globally without travelling. I personally think that these
technologies
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 can be both positive and negative development. On the one hand, these developments can be extremely beneficial. As
it
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can be seen that
people
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 are now able to interact more promptly and economically by
emails
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email
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,
mobiles
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mobile
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 or
video
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 calls which are as effective as
face to face
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face-to-face
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meeting
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meetings
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. In
this
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 way,
people
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 can keep a close
relationship
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relationships
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 with family,
friends
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 and colleagues. With these interactions, many of us can gain various benefits, not only in work but
also
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 in social contexts.
On the other hand
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, it is undeniable that these
technologies
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 can
also
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 cause negative influences
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 as isolating
people
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 and discouraging real interaction between
people
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.
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 many teenagers and some adults in
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 modern world choose to make
friends
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 online rather than socialise with others in the real world. In conclusion, it is true to say that the advancement of technology has certainly revolutionised communication between
people
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, but at the same
time
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 it should be noted that not all of the outcomes of
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 revolution have been positive.
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, it is important to raise awareness to
public
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the public
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 that actual communication is more important than visual interaction to minimise its repercussion.
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