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The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. --DELETED LINK--

The table below gives information about student enrolments at Manchester University in 1937, 1967 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. --DELETED LINK--
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the table indicates data regarding individuals who enrol in Manchester University in three different years, which are 1937, 1967 and 2017. As seen in the table, there was a consistent rise in the number of
students
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 who enrolled.
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, the proportion of international
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 experienced significant growth. In 1937, there were 327 persons who is interested in applying to Manchester University. The compositions were 45% of female and 55% of male.
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, more than half of the population were living near the campus. During
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 year, less than 10% were foreigners. The next 30 years show a significant change in the result with 1133 humans enrolled on
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 institute and mostly they're not from nearby cities.
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, based on gender classification, 1967 shows a similar situation to 1937 where the majority of those who registered were gentlemen.
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 but not least, the year 2017 showed an outstanding number of 6254
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 where mostly occupied by women.
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, no more than 3% live within 40 miles of the institute.
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 but not least, more than 30% of 6254 were international
students
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 who came from overseas.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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