Nowadays celebrities are more famous for their glamour and wealth than for their achivements and this set bad example to the young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
At present, the majority of
people
of a name are famous thanks only to their great fortune and luxury than thanks to own
attainment Correct pronoun usage
their own
it
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apply
is demonstrate
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is demonstrated
to
the Change preposition
by
generation
spoiled Change noun form
generation's
behavior
. It Change the spelling
behaviour
is depends
on how every person Change the verb form
depends
accept
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accepts
manifestation
of Add an article
the manifestation
this
type and from the
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apply
celebrities
auditory. Change noun form
celebrity's
celebrities'
Hence
, I firmly disagree with this
notion and my essay will elaborate on this
in the following paragraphs.
In the first place, some people
cannot understand the content of recognizable people
, as it is perhaps that look through the lens of hatred or envy,
after Remove the comma
apply
al
everyone Correct your spelling
all
want
chic Change the verb form
wants
life
. envy generate
the statement that millions on the card Correct subject-verb agreement
generates
that is
all these people
have. Consequently
, men do not wish
know what kind of way they reach Add the particle
towish
to
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apply
the
dream Change the word
their
life
. Eventually, the big status is the achievement that will not came
from Change the verb form
come
sky
. it has been shown from C. Ronaldu`s history of achieving goals. Every footballer Add an article
the sky
know
that Ronaldu was from a lean family and he did not have the opportunity to play. And he Correct subject-verb agreement
knows
attempt
to make his mother Change the verb form
attempts
fotunate
and give her everything.
What is more, it is undeniable thatCorrect your spelling
fortunate
,
Celebrities tend to demonstrate Remove the comma
apply
own
Correct pronoun usage
their own
luxury
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luxurious
life
moments more than simple things. As unremarkable content is not delightful for audible. Followers on social media wait
only Add the preposition
forwait
elegant
and charming aspects from stars, and their accomplishment is not relevant. Change preposition
for elegant
According to
a recent study, in
the closed interview with figures revealed that more personalities are of the same opinion. Almost everyone Change preposition
apply
responed
that the fans are more curious Correct your spelling
responded
their
abundant view than Change preposition
about their
another
.
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others
To conclude
, to the public is
more interesting their aesthetic Unnecessary verb
apply
life
than achievement
type of education or principles. And the reason Correct article usage
the achievement
of
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for
this
is the thinking of audible.Submitted by Allazhar on
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