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*Newspapers are less important nowadays because we have up-to-date access to the news on the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#*newspapers #access #news #internet
It is argued that newspapers have lost their influence in the modern world because most individuals are convenient to read the
news
 on the
internet
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. I completely agree with the idea that most
of
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the
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people
are
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like to search
news
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for news
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 on the
internet
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 rather than
the
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 newspaper. There are
a
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various
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of
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reasons why I believe
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internet
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 is a useful way to read the
news
 . One possible reason is that we can read only that
news
 easily which
are
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interested
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for
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 us.
For example
, if people want to read sports
news
then
 they can directly go to the sports
news
 without any struggle.
As a result
, it saves
our
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 time and encourages us to read
a daily
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news
. Another reason is that it saves
for
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our environment because we have to cut trees which are helped to make
a
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paper.
For
this
 reason, our earth will get polluted.
However
, reading
news
 on the
internet
 helps to reduce the
uses
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 of the
papers
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 and makes our environment
eco- friendly
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.
In addition
, as it saves our money, we have to purchase newspaper daily which is
waste
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our
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 money. Now we do not need to buy it
due to
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internet
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.
For instance
, in Bangalore, people have to buy
newspaper
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newspapers
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 which is 20 taka and they have to fix 600
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 per month from their income source. In conclusion, considering the factors discussed
about
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. I believe
internet
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 is
the
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 breathtaking way to read the
news
 which will mitigate the reading of paper base
news
 and keeps our earth safe, modern and easier
also
.
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