Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think advantages of charging people for a museum outweigh disadvantages?

Nowadays, whether
museums
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charge has attracted numerous controversies and drawn the attention of the public. Some
people
hold the view that charging
people
for a museum is a better idea,
while
others think it has more disadvantages. In my eyes, its advantages are more than
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disadvantages
because of the cultural and financial reasons.
Firstly
, it has been
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why I reckon paid
museums
are wiser. Admittedly, the positive aspects of
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museum
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must be considered. There is no doubt that it attracts more
people
to come because you do not need to pay.
However
, I still believe
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paid
museums
have many ways enriched
people
's lives.
For example
, one Indian artist, Lucy Blair, once said"When you pay the fee for the
museums
, you pay more attention to the detailed information of the displays.
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this
leads us
know
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further
about the culture."
Thus
it is clearly shown that the benefits of
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paid
museums
are much better than
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.
Moreover
,
aother
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another
other
aspect that should be considered is
financial
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reason
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. As far as
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museums
are concerned, the ultimate aim of
museums
is to run a
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business.
For instance
, a recent article published in Nelson Magazine revealed that
museums
absolutely need the fee of admission.
Therefore
, they have enough money to invest themselves better. Undoubtedly, it is a clear indication that the good sides of paid
museums
are more than
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bad sides.
To sum up
, I insist that the positive aspects of paid
musuems
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museums
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more than
its
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negative aspects given the reasons outlined above. In order to address
this
issue, the government and
museums
should make a concerted effort to find a solution.
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