The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.
The two pie charts compare how Australian citizens utilize six energy technologies namely, heating, cooling, lighting, refrigeration,
water
heating, and other appliances in their homes with regard to its pollution.
Overall
, heating and
water
heating
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made up the biggest proportion
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of all energy usage; meanwhile, cooling and lighting applications were the lowest. Looking at the figure in more detail, both heating and
water
heating occupied almost 80% of Australian household energy use.
Whereas
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cooling methods
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as refrigerating and cooling, were less popular with only 7% and 2%. Meanwhile, refrigerating, other appliances, and lighting despite their minimal contribution
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households,
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all produce almost the double gas emissions of around 55%. Heating,
in contrast
, generates nearly half the amount, making it the least polluting.
However
,
water
heating and cooling emit 32% and 3%, which is a considerable amount of gas emissions with respect to the
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of times
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being used.
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  • Energy consumption
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Sustainable practices
  • Energy efficiency
  • Renewable energy
  • Fossil fuels
  • Carbon footprint
  • Eco-friendly appliances
  • Insulation
  • Solar panels
  • Recycling
  • Climate change
  • Kilowatt-hour (kWh)
  • Emissions-intensive
  • Energy audit
  • Smart meters
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