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The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.

The bar charts describe how much time a teacher spent at three school levels in four different countries in 2001.
the bar graph illustrates the
number
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 of
hours
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 a teacher spent at 3 educational levels in 4 particular nations in the year 2001.
overall
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, a majority of teaching
hours
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 were spent in the upper secondary among the surveyed countries,
while
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 only a meagre portion of time was arranged for the primary
level
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 . remarkably teachers in the
USA
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 head the list in the
number
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 of teaching
hours
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.
to begin
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 with, in terms of primary schools, the average teacher working
hours
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 in both Japan and Iceland accounted for roughly 600
hours
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 in 2001. the figure for the
USA
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's elementary
level
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 was far higher than these aforementioned categories, reaching 750
hours
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,
whereas
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 only approximately 620
hours
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 were spent on Spain's primary
level
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.
in contrast
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, the
number
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 of
hours
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 the
usa
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 teachers spent at the upper secondary
level
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 hit its peak of 1200
hours
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,
while
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 japan teachers only worked for 700
hours
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 in
this
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 category in the given time.
additionally
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, the same
number
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 of teaching
hours
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 was recorded in Spain and Iceland, making up 900
hours
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 . the category of the lower secondary
level
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 in Japan and Iceland accounted for roughly 680
hours
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 and 600
hours
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, respectively.
this
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 figure in the
USA
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 took up 1000
hours
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 in comparison with only 750
hours
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 in Spain in 2001.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, hours, level, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar charts, time allocation, primary education, lower secondary level, upper secondary level
  • teacher workload, classroom hours, non-teaching duties
  • educational system, comparative analysis, pedagogic practices
  • instructional time, professional development, teacher's responsibilities
  • discrepancies, workload distribution, teaching hours
  • statistical data, time management, educators, pedagogues
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