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You have just read an article in a national newspaper which claims that town centers in your country all look very similar to each other. You don't fully agree with this opinion. Write a letter to the editor of the newspaper. In your letter say which point in the article you agree with explain ways in which your town center is different from most other town centers offer to give a guided tour of your town to the writer of the article

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Dear
the
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editor, I am writing
this
 letter to express my disagreements with an article in a national
news paper
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newspaper
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.
To begin
 with, I
am totally agree
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 with your opinion about
a
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the
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 population in
city
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the city
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centre
in
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of
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 my country. You mentioned
Tokyo
 as the
most busy
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 and hectic
city
 and as widely known,
Tokyo
 is one of the growing population
city
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cities
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of
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in
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 the world. It getting excessive people in a small
city
 nowadays. Having said that, I
am totally disagree
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 with your opinion of all
city
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the city
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centre
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centres
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 in my country look very similar. The town
centre
 in our country is
quiet
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different from each other in
a
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various ways. In
Tokyo
, there are various food that you can enjoy and various
shop
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shops
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 to enjoy some shopping.
In addition
, it is able to have
real
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 experience of
Nintendo
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a Nintendo
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 Mario cart in
real
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a real
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city
centre
 in
Tokyo
.
In contrast
,
Yokohama
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in Yokohama
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 and Chiba, there is nothing like shops and
restaurant
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restaurants
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 in
Tokyo
.
Lastly
, I would love to invite you
to
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Tokyo
 and have a little tour of the
city
centre
in
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this
 summer. Looking forward to hearing from you. Sincerely,
Submitted by summer.na.9678 on

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