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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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In today’s world,
understanding
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 of reading has changed
last
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 two decades. With technology, e-reading is becoming more popular because someone believes that societies would get adapt
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 developments. Nowadays
people
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 have lots of opportunities
about
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for
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 online reading
such
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 as
newspaper
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newspapers
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, magazines, novels, etc. but old-school methods
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 going like in the past. My humble idea is that both views have correct points and I will talk about both sights’ pros and cons.
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 old-school media has existed for centuries and I think that
people
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 would like to feel media physically.
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, when
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 visit the library, they are becoming more sensible because knowledge and stories just turned physical type.
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, another beneficial point would be that online newspapers couldn’t replace
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printed
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 because newspapers are generally sharing significant developments about
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the community
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. That’s why
reader
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readers
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 naturally aim to feel the reality of news and they have still done
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 thing as same as in the past.
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, new technological improvements jumped on the bandwagon and different
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 of alternatives are borning with high-tech equipment. As an example
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reading tablets new phenomenon for online users and there are lots of benefits for
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the environments
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environments
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environment
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 and
comfortability
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. Reading tablets are definitely eco-friends because they are preventing to deforestation of forests.
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, traditional media couldn’t have any flexibility for daily life.
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, reading at night is tiring for
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 because arranging of correct angle cannot
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. Hereby, being environment friendly and comfortable will increase
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usage in coming decades.
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, both views have
advantage
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an advantage
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 from their sight and
people
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 should continue how they prefer to read. I am currently accepting two
side
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 of
coin
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a coin
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 and humanity will choose the best way in the near future.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

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Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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