Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general.
People
nowadays spent less Use synonyms
time
on leisure activities or Use synonyms
to cultivate
personal interests, Change the verb form
cultivating
one
of the cogent reasons is Correct word choice
and one
due to
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high
competitive and Replace the word
highly
fast changing
Add a hyphen
fast-changing
societies
. The phenomena as Use synonyms
such
not only Linking Words
provoking
negative Wrong verb form
provoke
affects
on Correct your spelling
effects
individuals
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,
but Remove the comma
apply
also
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deriving
drawbacks to Wrong verb form
derive
societies
in long term.
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To begin
with, it is hard for Linking Words
people
to find Use synonyms
balance
between work and life since modern technologies are constantly being introduced into workplaces to enhance productivity. To remainAdd an article
a balance
the balance
competitive
Add the comma(s)
, competitive people,
people
need to Use synonyms
spent
more Change the verb
spend
time
on study, and the acquisition of new skills with full-Use synonyms
time
jobs could be Use synonyms
Use synonyms
time consuming
, which left no Add a hyphen
time-consuming
time
for Use synonyms
people
to develop their personal interests. Use synonyms
However
, the lack of leisure activities could lead to various negative effects Linking Words
to
both Change preposition
on
individuals
and Use synonyms
societies
.
First of all, spending long hours Use synonyms
on
working or studying could stimulate Change preposition
apply
negative
influence on Correct article usage
a negative
people
, mentally and physically. Use synonyms
While
the working hours in commercial institutions Linking Words
is
getting longer over Change the verb form
are
time
, Use synonyms
individuals
barely have Use synonyms
time
to have personal Use synonyms
time
, which could increase Use synonyms
the
anxiety and affect their sleeping Correct article usage
apply
qualities
, leading to various diseases, including obesity and depression. Fix the agreement mistake
quality
On the other hand
, entertainment industries, including movie Linking Words
theaters
and restaurants, could endure a decrease Change the spelling
theatres
of
revenue Change preposition
in
due to
a large population who work too hard to be able to enjoy life. Which not only will restrict the development of Linking Words
local
economy, but reduce Correct article usage
the local
the
work opportunities.
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apply
To conclude
, a Linking Words
high
competitive Replace the word
highly
Use synonyms
societies
is the main cause of a drastic drop Change the noun form
society
of
Change preposition
in
time
Use synonyms
people
spent on leisure activities, which could derive various negative effects Use synonyms
to
Change preposition
on
individuals
and Use synonyms
societies
, be it the increase of correlative diseases, Use synonyms
and
the shrinking of Correct word choice
or
local
Correct article usage
the local
economic
.Replace the word
economies
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