some people say that the Government should not put money on building theaters and sports stadium. Others say that they should spend more money on medical care and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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and different perspectives in

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world, some want their

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to spend

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want to their

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spend

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are the most important factors in order to develop a

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medicine,

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a healthier body. In specific, without medical

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people

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will suffer from diseases which might lead to the fall down of the

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's population and

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their citizens to access

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education

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's population drop, there will be a lack of starvation in that

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has been the most effective problem throughout the world. Without

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people

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get a job leading to another problem, lack of unemployment. Again, without

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get to work, making the

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fall. In short, medical

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about, without these 2 factors, their

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are not as important as

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so the

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about these factors much.

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theaters

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to listen to music

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by acting and

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sport

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stadium

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sports like football.

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is not safe for

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construction.

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can afford medical

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should spend

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theaters

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as they are places for

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to relax on their

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can reduce their stress when coming to

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theaters

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as they can actually listen to music or support their

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team

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football. In summary, building

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theaters

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stadium

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might cause some harmful

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the authority and the

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can afford both health

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theaters

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for the citizens. Spending

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sport

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bring bother harmful and beneficial effects. In conclusion, the

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should

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care

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about medical

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before spending

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some people say that the Government should not put money on building theaters and sports stadium. Others say that they should spend more money on medical care and education. Discuss both views and give your opinion

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