The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables ,sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows relative price changes for fresh fruits and vegetables ,sugar and sweets and carbonated drinks between 1978 and 2009.summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The graph shows the
price
of fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
, sugar and sweets, consumer-
price
index and carbonated drinks from 1979 to 2009. The
price
of fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
from 1979 to 1983 increased from about 60 to 100. The
price
dropped from about 100 to about 90
in
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between 1984 and 1985. It continued rising from 1985 to 2009 and hit a mark of nearly 325. The
price
of fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
was equal to others but it quickly rose
up
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from only 90 to 325 making them
to
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be the most expensive.
Next,
the
price
of sugar and sweets
also
increased from 1979 to between 1981 and 1983. It was the most expensive product when the
price
was more than 100, higher than fresh
fruits
and
vegetables
. It slightly dropped in 1983 and continued to rise again from 1984 to 2009.
Next,
the
price
of the consumer-
price
index was stable, it didn’t drop at any point from 1979 to 2009 but continued to rise slightly.
Finally
,
the
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carbonated drinks have the lowest
price
but it is
also
stable, didn’t stop and continued to rise up from 60 to over 150.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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