Globalization is creating a world of one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Modern
techonolgy
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technology
is making the
world
so predictable by opening the same stores all over the
world
such
as Macdonald, KFC, Apple
store
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, extra. It is claimed
by
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some people that it
have
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a bad impact on national identity,
while
other have opposing thinking. I
am
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totaly
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totally
disagree with the
statment
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statement
and think making the
world
one culture is not
destorying
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destroying
the specific
indentity
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identity
of a
country
. All
kind
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of stores
are
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opened around the globe to easily access the food, clothes and product that they use in their
country
.
These
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all kind of stuff is just a daily useable thing rather than a national
indetity
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identity
. There are
alot
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a lot
of things in the
world
that can not be seen in more than one
country
that
make
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it
uniuqe
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unique
.
For example
,
pyaramid
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pyramid
can only be seen in
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or
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and
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the stautue
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stautue
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statue
of
liberty
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is only in America. Even though the invention of the
airplane
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aeroplane
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have
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made it easy to travel that person from
the
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around the
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globe are
permanetly
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permanently
living in
other
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another country
other countries
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country
.
However
, they are still making their own
comunity
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community
wherever they
starts
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to live, it still
represent
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represents
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their nationality.
In other words
, Brampton is mainly known as a
punjabi
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comunity
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community
and it still shows that person
are
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is
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living there
is
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are
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from
punjab
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, India. As the result,
country
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the country
a country
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can
reprsent
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represent
it's
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its
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identity in several ways which can not be
destored
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restored
destroyed
by globalization In conclusion, every
country
have
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a
uniqe
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unique
identity which can be
diffrnate
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diffracted
from other in the things that are only available
at
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some places and by
pearson
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person
Pearson
that belongs to that place.
Modernazation
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Modernization
can not
destore
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restore
destroy
that by making only a single culture as people are not even ready to
forgot
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their culture even though they are living in
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a forign
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forign
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foreign
.
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