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Globalization is creating a world of one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

#globalization #world #culture #identity
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Modern technology is making the world so predictable by opening the same stores all over the world
such
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 as Macdonald, KFC, Apple stores, extra. It is claimed by some people that it has a bad impact on national
identity
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,
while
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other
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 have opposing thinking. I totally disagree with the statement and think making the earth one culture is not destroying the specific
identity
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 of a
provincial
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province
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. All kinds of stores
is
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are
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 opened around the globe to easily access the food, clothes and product that they use in their
provincial
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.
This
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 all kind of stuff is just a daily useable thing rather than a national
identity
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. There are a lot of things in the world that can not be seen in more than one country that
make
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 it unique.
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,
pyramid
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the pyramid
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 can only be seen in Egypt and
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a statue
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statue
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Statue
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 of Liberty is only in America. Even though the invention of the aeroplane has made it easy to travel that
person
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people
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 around the globe are permanently living in other countries.
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, they are still making their own community wherever they start to live, it still represents their nationality.
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, Brampton is mainly known as a Punjabi community and it still shows that person is living there are from Punjab, India. As the result, the country can represent its
identity
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 in several ways which can not be destroyed by globalization In conclusion, every
provincial
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 has a unique
identity
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 which can be diffracted from other in the things that are only available in some places and by
person
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a person
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 that belongs to that place. Modernization can not destroy that by making only a single culture as people are not even ready to forget their culture even though they are living in
foreign
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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