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The proportion of carbohydrates, protein and fat in three different diets

The pie charts compare the percentage of three different components of food in healthy, average and sports
diets
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Overall
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, it can be seen that the major element of nutrition for all types of
diets
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 are carbohydrates,
while
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 fat has the lowest percentage in the composition of food. Looking at the charts, a healthy sports
diet
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 contains 60% of carbohydrates, which is higher by 10% than a healthy
diet
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 and by 20% than the average
diet
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, the highest proportion of protein is in the average
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,
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 the fitness and healthy
diets
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 contain 25% and 30%, respectively. In comparison, both healthy and average
diets
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 contain a similar percentage of fat, at 20%.
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, a healthy
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 for sport contains 15% of fat.

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