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the information below shows the results of a new council speeding fine system in the town of Lanastone which was introduced in 1992.

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 a new penalty technique for speeding implemented in the town of Lanastone in 1992.
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 of
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 system for speeding grew the
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 of penalties issued, reaching the highest
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 in 2005. The
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 reached a peak in 1990 and started dropping for the next years after
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 fine system. In 1995 the
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 of speeding fines handed down made up 350 and started increasing over the next years.
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reached a peak in 2005 and constituted 610 fines,
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, by 2015 it slowly dropped to 590. The implementation of a fine system for speeding closely mirrors the
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accidents
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Lanastone.
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 250 in 1985 and steadily rose to approximately 275.
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, the situation with road traffic
accidents
 significantly declined to 100 in 2015.
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