Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “Overall, the widespread use of the internet has a mostly positive effect on life in today’s world.” Use reasons and details to support your opinion.

Most everyone agrees that modern technology has dramatically affected society in numerous ways. In my view, using the
Internet
has become a necessity as it has a number of benefits on a daily basis. There are several reasons why I feel
this
way, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin
with, the
Internet
helped normalize our society and life, which was destroyed because of COVID-19. The government required the public to stay at home and be quarantined from work and other activities in order to be able to prevent the spread of COVID-19. Many people lost their jobs and became depressed because of the lockdown. The
Internet
and
smartphone
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( based on the
Internet
) helped minimize these problems. My personal experience is a compelling example of
this
. During the 4 month quarantine period, I was still able to work from home by advising patients, who were having dental problems, through communication channels
such
as Facebook, zalo, and Viber. Particularly, I
also
participated in a group including many doctors of different majors supporting the government in the fight against COVID-19. We took care of the patients having some light symptoms by guiding them on how to take medicine, and how to take care of themselves for better resistance. These issues were solved through Zalo, a popular medium in my country. If the
Internet
were developed
this
much, it would be impossible to work from home.
On the other hand
, the broad use of the
Internet
makes it possible for everyone to keep in touch with each other. Nowadays, society has many platforms where they
are connecting
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with their families and friends. In the past, when someone’s relative had to emigrate, most of them wrote letters or internationally called, which was very expensive. The letters took a long time to reach their destination. Now it is easier for people, they can call, and message from any place to their countries, families and friends.
For instance
, my husband and his family emigrated to America about 4 years ago and I still live in Vietnam at present. Because the time zones of the two countries are different, I use the
Internet
all the time in order to be able to talk to him whenever I or he is free. We can chat, call via video and see each other through a small screen and
this
makes the geographical distance between two countries no longer a big problem for us. It’s important to me to talk with him every day and feel close to me. In conclusion, the
Internet
is an essential technology in life, which promotes a better way of living. The
Internet
is massively important as it leads to easier communication and helps us to live conveniently.
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task response
Ensure your essay directly addresses the prompt by clearly stating your agreement with the statement and providing reasons and details to support your opinion.
coherence and cohesion
Work on organizing your ideas in a more logical structure. Consider using topic sentences for each paragraph and ensuring a smooth flow of ideas throughout the essay.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • widespread
  • fosters
  • connectivity
  • geographical
  • facilitating
  • revolutionized
  • e-commerce
  • telecommuting
  • digital divide
  • privacy concerns
  • misinformation
  • dependency
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