Many people today spend most of their fre time watching TV series or movies instead of going out. Doyou think this is right or wrong?

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Nowadays, a lot of individuals prefer to spend their free
time
at
home
rather than go outside. In my opinion,
This
is the right decision. entertainment
by
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through
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TV shows, movies, and activities at
home
instead
of going outside and spending huge amounts. In
this
essay
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i
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I
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will
disscuse
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discuss
more about my thoughts
.
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more.
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Due to
their
hactic
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hectic
working schedules, everyone loves to stay in a
peace
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peaceful
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full
place
, taking some
refreshment
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refreshments
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from comedy
flims
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films
. After the
pendemic
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pandemic
endemic
, most people are afraid to go
public
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to public
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places,
crowded
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or crowded
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areas
due to
various
type
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types
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of variants;
however
, being infected with the covid virus is
a
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the
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best example
for
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of
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the
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apply
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staying safe at
home
and
do
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doing
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some
excersice
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exercise
to make
you
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apply
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fit and
healthly
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healthy
at
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apply
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home
. There is the
lots
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lot
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of lack of
time
persons
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people
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are not prefer to
long
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the long
a long
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destination
due to
heavy
triffic
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traffic
on road. Living
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in a
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a smart cities
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smart cities
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we have so many facilities available like online shopping, food delivery at your
home
,
easy
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and easy
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connectivity through social media and mobile phones. So we do not spend so much
time
in traffic and
rusy
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rusty
area
moreover
garb these
servies
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services
at
home
.
On the other hand
, go outside with
friends
and spend more money on food and parties,
then
invite your
friends
to your
place
and chill out for much longer than spending one
time
in luxury places. As we all know, people might feel isolated in their lives if they do not socialise with their
friends
and relatives, but it is good if they invite them to their
place
and connect over
video
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a video
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call. Accepting these things is preferable to going into a crowded area, which can lead to infection. In conclusion,
mostly
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most
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people spend their free and valuable
time
at their
place
and prefer watching movies and TV shows and
stay
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staying
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safe and
healty
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healthy
at
home
. I would say, honestly speaking I love to spend my weekends at my
home
or my
friends
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friend's
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house with lots of
gossips
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gossip
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, new web series on
netflix
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Netflix
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also
with good and
healty
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healthy
food.
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